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Sonnet #2
May 29, 2004

My emotions, which I strive to control
But I cannot succeed in my attempt,
Are caused by your hurtful and tactless words,
And my heart is now controlled by contempt.

Too many times have you ridiculed me,
And now my anger will not stay concealed.
I'm astounded by your impudicity,
I will speak up, my lips will not stay sealed.

As sadness and anger pulse through my veins,
I try to keep my shaking body still.
If only you knew, your speech brought these pains,
If only you knew that your words could kill.

To you my last minutes I dedicate,
Let your life be long, and free of my hate.

Post edited at 10:15 pm on April 28, 2008 by Just Waiting Here

Example:

"When I consider how my light is spent" (from On His Blindness by John Milton)

So while you may use the fourteen lines and the rhyme scheme, and even end with a rhyming couplet, you have to keep in mind that the rhythm is also entirely essential to it being a sonnet.

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Let yourself be enchanted,
You just might break through
To ever ever after

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Just a point...when writing a sonnet, when you want it to actually be a sonnet, it must be written in iambic pentameter. That means that each line must consist of ten syllables, alternating between stressed and unstressed.  

Example:

"When I consider how my light is spent" (from On His Blindness by John Milton)

So while you may use the fourteen lines and the rhyme scheme, and even end with a rhyming couplet, you have to keep in mind that the rhythm is also entirely essential to it being a sonnet.

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Lol, yes, I know.  But I'm also not good enough with English to be able to use iambic pentameter.  I did try, and I know that the flow is disrupted at many lines, but oh well.  I just had to write them for class when I was 14, and this is one of the one's I've come up with (along with others).

Hehe, but thank you!  If you have any suggestions for any specific line, it's more than welcome.  English is my worst subject, and poetry is definitely not my forte, lol.  So any criticism/suggestions are appreciated :).