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Quote: from xshaix at 4:32 pm on April 23, 2008

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 And this is all artistic license?

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The majority.

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I know exactly who you are.
What's with the anon?

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I've been dying to tell you anything you wanna hear,
'Cause that's just who I am this week.

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A man who wallows in self pity is a man who deserves to remain there.

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Indeed.

Overall, I think it's powerful. You have a wonderful sight. Seriously.

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and i wanted to ride with Yuri Gagarin
as he circled all around my world

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Garbage.

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it's good, if slightly pretentious.

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I don't even mean that as a criticism, lots of writing is pretentious. It's just the mix of angst and the tone and your choice of words (i.e "Notice the use of the personal object pronoun. How humorous.") comes off as a bit pretentious.

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- لورين

bang bang bang bang bang

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Quote: from Anonymous at 8:50 am on April 28, 2008it's good, if slightly pretentious. What makes you say that, m'dear.  

I don't even mean that as a criticism, lots of writing is pretentious. It's just the mix of angst and the tone and your choice of words (i.e "Notice the use of the personal object pronoun. How humorous.") comes off as a bit pretentious.

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