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( SoaringFalcon2010 )
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as we walk through the darkened streets,
side by side the tension heats.
as we wished we knew what to do,
not knowing the other has no clue.
why does love have to be like this,
why does it have to hurt what happened to bliss?
i look in your eyes and see myself,
this obssession can not be good for my health.
i just wished i could tell you how im feeling,
not knowing the same problem your dealing.
i feel like a stranger in my own mind,
because with you im compleatly blind.
why cant we just tell eachother,
why hiding it do we even bother?
as i look in your eyes i see the tears,
and the truth my ears hears.
you tell me how much you care,
and our lives we shoud share.
as i feel the tears in my own eyes,
i tell u the story of my lies.
and then we walk off hand in hand,
together forever we to stand.
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"She loves the broken ones, the ones that need a little
patchin' up She see's the diamond in the rough and
makes it shine like new It really doesn't take that
much, a willing heart and a tender touch."
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carracer
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Its good
i think it would be better as a not rhyming poem though
and maybe expand on the darkened streets image
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The world is only as sweet as you make it and only as terrible as you see it
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1:08 pm on July 2, 2008 | Joined: Dec. 2007 | Days Active: 264
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I like your poem, but I couldn't pay attention because we have the same avatar. 
