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what do u think of this poem?
Replies: 9Last Post Aug. 19, 2008 8:39am by Velico112
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i love it 5 17%
it's pretty good 3 10%
it's ok 12 42%
i hate it 8 28%
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( mackenzie13 )


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i wrote this when i was 12..

it seems so cliche
to write about tears,
but it's what i feel,
what i fear

they pour down my face
just like a river,
they give me goosebumps
make me shiver

even though it's over,
i still wish there could be us
feel all that care
all that trust

i keep hoping it will be you
when i pick up the phone
but the deed is done,
the seed has been sown

all that i wrote in this poem is true,
even this last line:
i love you

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Time is a great teacher, but unfortunately it kills all its
pupils. -Louis Hector Berlioz


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I hate it.

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This looks like a horror movie waiting to happen.

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acausedelle


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It seems too mundane.

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Carry me through the night
Hold me secure in flight
Sing me to sleep tonight

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i hate it.

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Lose yourself in lines dissecting.

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lame.

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it's just you and I, everywhereeeee

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Its decent.

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Lihiro


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Lameish.

But don't we all hate poems we wrote when we were 12?

I CRINGE at mine.

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jamesshadowwolf

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he im a guy and for a 12 year old that was pritty good.  dont lisen to the others puttign you down. they probly just people who think ohh its a poem...

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It's good for a 12 year old to have wrote.

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Velico112


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excellent

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