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k, so im stuck.
Replies: 4Last Post Aug. 19, 2008 1:07pm by verl mcverl
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( iwantcandy )


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this is what i have so far.

You didn't have to say anything,
your eyes said it all.
Nothing can make it leave,
since the day i made that call.
The smallest thing can change you.....

k yeah,
Something is missing.
It just isn't right.
Thoughts?
Ideas?


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tennisplayerV2


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what is this even about might help

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xBeautifulTragedyx


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It's fine to me.

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mudonthetires14


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it needs another line.. i dk what though. i suck at this stuff.

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verl mcverl


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try and make your rhyming lines have the same amount of syllables, that might help

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The moment I get repetitive, or plagiarise...
tell me, I can't help it and need correcting occasionally :(

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