You didn't have to say anything, your eyes said it all. Nothing can make it leave, since the day i made that call. The smallest thing can change you.....
k yeah, Something is missing. It just isn't right. Thoughts? Ideas?
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tennisplayerV2
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what is this even about might help
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xBeautifulTragedyx
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It's fine to me.
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mudonthetires14
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it needs another line.. i dk what though. i suck at this stuff.
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verl mcverl
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try and make your rhyming lines have the same amount of syllables, that might help
------- The moment I get repetitive, or plagiarise... tell me, I can't help it and need correcting occasionally :(
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