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I need help / opioion
Replies: 3Last Post Nov. 17, 2008 1:14pm by nearlyinsane
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( emmywashere3849 )


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I need a title
and I cant decide whether or not I like the last stanza, should I drop it or change it.

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In the silence of my mind
I hear you
You call out to me and I try to find you
but I can not, you are not there

In the darkness of my mind
I see you
You hold out your arms to me
But I can not get to you, you are not there

In the blandness of my mind
I taste you
You are so sweet, and beckon to me
But I can not have you, you are not there

In the hallow of my mind
I feel you
You are so warm, I try to hold you
But I can not, you are not there

In the stillness of my mind
I smell you
You are sensual and so inviting
But I can not really breath you in, you are not there

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In the wakening of my mind
I have you
You are in my arms, so safe
I'll keep you, because you are right here

Post edited at 1:05 pm on Nov. 17, 2008 by emmywashere3849

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Wake.

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Awaken in Silence

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I'll follow you into the dark.

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nearlyinsane


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Sensing you.

Something to do with senses would be PERFECT.

P.S. I like it :D

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We can understand the sentiment you're saying to us,
Oh, but sensible selves, can you kindly shut up?


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