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Will this get an A???
Replies: 10 — Last Post Dec. 21, 2008 9:22pm by Flikted001
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I'm supposed to be writing a poem for school {again}, and I need to know if this will work.
We're supposed to write something on one of four things:
Teen sexuality
A world tragedy {9/11, Katrina, ect}
OR
Lost loved ones..

I wrote one on 9/11..
Do you think it'll get me a passing grade?
(It also can't be longer than 15 lines)

Remember it
Flying fire
Remember this
Death for hire
Remember all
The loved ones gone
Remember that
We must move on
Remember that
It changes nothing
Remember that
The end is coming


Not my best work.. but I think its good enough.
...Opinions?

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"We're supposed to write something on one of four things:
Teen sexuality
A world tragedy {9/11, Katrina, ect}
OR
Lost loved ones.. "


Epic Fail.

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Definitely good enough.
I guess it depends how hey mark your work, but it shows a lot of language techniques and a bit of imagery
the whole idea is very clever.
I like it (:

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Quote: from look over here at 10:27 am on Dec. 20, 2008
"We're supposed to write something on one of four things:  
Teen sexuality  
A world tragedy {9/11, Katrina, ect}  
OR  
Lost loved ones.. "

 
Epic Fail.

I don't remember  the other one. Something to do with adolensense. <--- Excuse mispellings please..

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Quote: from look over here at 10:27 am on Dec. 20, 2008
"We're supposed to write something on one of four things:  
Teen sexuality  
A world tragedy {9/11, Katrina, ect}  
OR  
Lost loved ones.. "

 
Epic Fail.

^ this

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Last line doesent fit in that well with the rhyme of the rest of the poem.

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Quote: from look over here at 10:27 am on Dec. 20, 2008
"We're supposed to write something on one of four things:  
Teen sexuality  
A world tragedy {9/11, Katrina, ect}  
OR  
Lost loved ones.. "

 
Epic Fail.

Aha i thought that but then i couldn't be bothered to process the fact that it was a fail....nicely done.

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Its gewd ^^ ^^.
XxXx.

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okay... thanks.

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Depends on what grade you're in. This looks like a typical teenage poem, no offense.

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haha. i got a 97% on it. w00t

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