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is this poem/writing better
Replies: 4 — Last Post July 5 6:48pm by xxemoxdemonxx
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than the last haha, i dont know if i have posted it before but oh well. this one doesn't rhyme

As you hold me close we both begin to fall, fall into into the depths of which i have never touched, felt, or knew existed. Where is this coming from, why is it here? Then you rip the pulmonary veins that were kept so safe, we both begin to collapse into another unknown, the unknown and unwanted.

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I don't like this one.
Other was better, and seemed more thought out.

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This is very odd for a prose piece.  It sort of goes to shit at the end, but I sort of like it for some reason.  It definitely has potential.

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It's interesting

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i like it (:

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