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Replies: 12Last Post Oct. 24 7:48pm by The Mixed Tape
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Abby and Dayze are both 15 years old - they're best friends or "BFF's" as they like to call it...
Everything they do; they do together. There really is not a more spectacular friendship, But when an argument drives them both over the top - they both spiral into worlds of their own. Lost with no direction and no-one but each other can help them.

How does this seem for a Synopsis for a 'novel' i am writting for NaNoWriMo ? :)  


(Anon because it's my book and i do not want people knowing i am writting it yet for the reason i will get annoyed about it of some members)

P.s Book is called Spiralling Route
and also - Dayze is pronounced Daisy

Post edited at 6:06 am on Oct. 24, 2009 by Anonymous


6:05 am on Oct. 24, 2009
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This story is done to death. Start again.

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Penultimate just means second to last you pretentious f*ck.

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Quote: from Frubeling at 2:11 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

This story is done to death. Start again.

What? :S noone dies..

6:14 am on Oct. 24, 2009
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Quote: from Anonymous at 2:14 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Frubeling at 2:11 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

This story is done to death. Start again.

What? :S noone dies..

*facepalm* You're a bit dim aren't you?!

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Quote: from Frubeling at 2:16 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Anonymous at 2:14 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Frubeling at 2:11 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

This story is done to death. Start again.
 
 What? :S noone dies..

*facepalm* You're a bit dim aren't you?!


No.. It just doesn't make sense... :/

6:19 am on Oct. 24, 2009
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Quote: from Anonymous at 2:19 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Frubeling at 2:16 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Anonymous at 2:14 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Frubeling at 2:11 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

This story is done to death. Start again.

  What? :S noone dies..

*facepalm* You're a bit dim aren't you?!


No.. It just doesn't make sense... :/

Done to death = used so many times that it's trite

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Penultimate just means second to last you pretentious f*ck.

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Quote: from Frubeling at 2:20 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Anonymous at 2:19 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Frubeling at 2:16 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Anonymous at 2:14 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Frubeling at 2:11 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

This story is done to death. Start again.
   
  What? :S noone dies..

*facepalm* You're a bit dim aren't you?!

 
 No.. It just doesn't make sense... :/  
 

Done to death = used so many times that it's trite


Oh.. but it's about eating disorders..
not like depression or anything. :S

6:25 am on Oct. 24, 2009
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A few pointers;
- Don't try to give the characters unnecessarily "cool" name variations, it distracts readers from the story as they try to figure out if they should read it as "zee" or "see".
- Frubeling is right. Come up with an original story line. The two best friends who get deeper and deeper into Anorexia and Bulimia has been done far too many times before - A Secret Between Friends, Wintergirls, I could go on. The point is, the narrative has become so familiar, it is boring.
- This "world of their own" could use some more elaboration, even if you just hint at what it is.

If you want to talk/ask me things/bounce ideas off each other, I'm here.
Good luck.

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Quote: from Natsy at 2:55 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

A few pointers;  
 - Don't try to give the characters unnecessarily "cool" name variations, it distracts readers from the story as they try to figure out if they should read it as "zee" or "see".
 - Frubeling is right. Come up with an original story line. The two best friends who get deeper and deeper into Anorexia and Bulimia has been done far too many times before - A Secret Between Friends, Wintergirls, I could go on. The point is, the narrative has become so familiar, it is boring.
 - This "world of their own" could use some more elaboration, even if you just hint at what it is.

If you want to talk/ask me things/bounce ideas off each other, I'm here.
Good luck.


It's based on a true thing though.. Between me and my friend Hananh..
Her E.D she calls Dayze and i call mine abby..
so it's like based or real events so i really dont know


9:29 am on Oct. 24, 2009
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Quote: from Anonymous at 5:29 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

Quote: from Natsy at 2:55 pm on Oct. 24, 2009

A few pointers;
  - Don't try to give the characters unnecessarily "cool" name variations, it distracts readers from the story as they try to figure out if they should read it as "zee" or "see".  
  - Frubeling is right. Come up with an original story line. The two best friends who get deeper and deeper into Anorexia and Bulimia has been done far too many times before - A Secret Between Friends, Wintergirls, I could go on. The point is, the narrative has become so familiar, it is boring.  
  - This "world of their own" could use some more elaboration, even if you just hint at what it is.  


 If you want to talk/ask me things/bounce ideas off each other, I'm here.  
 Good luck.


It's based on a true thing though.. Between me and my friend Hananh..  
Her E.D she calls Dayze and i call mine abby..  
so it's like based or real events so i really dont know



you give your eating disorders names?

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That actually sounds extremely interesting, and I think that it'll turn out extremely well, if given a decent story line and a well-written plot. If I may ask, what exactly is NaNoWriMo? I might be out of the loop on this :(

But it does sound really interesting, and I wish you the best of luck.

I agree with Natsy, though.

PS. it's extremely odd to name your eating disorders
but that's just me.
it might confuse the reader if they don't get it, however.


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Quote: from Eklipse at 1:08 am on Oct. 25, 2009

That actually sounds extremely interesting, and I think that it'll turn out extremely well, if given a decent story line and a well-written plot. If I may ask, what exactly is NaNoWriMo? I might be out of the loop on this :(

But it does sound really interesting, and I wish you the best of luck.  

I agree with Natsy, though.

PS. it's extremely odd to name your eating disorders
 but that's just me.
it might confuse the reader if they don't get it, however.


Nanowrimo is the national novel writing month (google it)
and thanks.

also in the book i use MY E.D names for the PEOPLE with the E.Ds

i didnt chose to name my E.D but whereas most people are like its ana its mia the sorta e.d voice called it self abbie..
its weird..


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OHOHOHOH.
I so knew that. :P

It is kind-of weird, but it definitely leaves me wondering how it's going to turn out.


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