Sleepy nights Suddenly my sleepy nights Make dreamy days At times I imagine his lips Or my lips Touching his lips And some nights I've heard his voice Calling to my captive soul Contained Controlled In love I'm sold To my own Wild fantasies That neither will be torn from me Nor fulfilled Dreamy day and sleepy night I am reminded of That line Deep red and scrolled across The monument of my emotions Erected there to Keep me In shackles Chained Contained Controlled In love Still sold And Bought with fools gold
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It's interesting, I think a little rough at parts. Like it felt to me that the last line didn't fit the rhythm of the whole poem. But I'm no expert.
Overall I liked it though.
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not my thing
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Well its good but personally Id change a few parts Still good though!
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