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A poem.
Replies: 5 — Last Post Oct. 24, 2008 5:57pm by ocdbabe
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Wealthy Hobo 		Reply
Sun high, thoughts low.
She'd never felt like this before.
The young lover was alone
even with a friend by her side.
She wished for rain to match her mood
and remembered the days when she prayed for light.
A friend by her side who spoke kind words
and reassured her she would be just fine.
A friend by her side who thought he knew
and assumed she spoke the truth.
Falling thoughts, rising sun.
She didn't care for serenity though.
All I had to do was look her in the eyes,
and I knew.


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you'd be dead.
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awwwwwww cool i think that you could use more words that sound the same but its fine like that

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chaosdisown


Soothsayer 		Reply
nice use of words, but the lines seem kinda lost in organization...

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Wealthy Hobo 		Reply
Thanks guys, yeah, I definitely am not good with the breaking of lines. Haha

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Soothsayer 		Reply
i mean, the foundation is good, but it needs more structure, something that brings it to life.

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Wealthy Hobo 		Reply
Quote: from chaosdisown at 5:54 pm on Oct. 24, 2008
i mean, the foundation is good, but it needs more structure, something that brings it to life.

I kind of threw it together.I like the general idea, but I know that it needs a bit more.

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