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Hey Jewlee Posted at 11:02 am on Sep. 27, 2008
They turn
and begin to walk
away from each other
her to the metro station
him to the cafe where he works
past the drunks clutching bottles
past the chic stores
past the boarded up buildings
past the place where they first met
she starts down the stairs
he goes through the door
into the train
behind the counter
gone.

thoughts?

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nikki123 Posted at 11:20 am on Sep. 27, 2008
not bad. would be a bit longer though and have a bit more detail but its alright. mediocre. keep trying.
Louisianaaa X3 Posted at 11:16 am on Sep. 27, 2008
awe i like it verryy much

good job..

cept its mushy..

carracer Posted at 11:05 am on Sep. 27, 2008
You said it yourself.
Its a lame poem.
sosupkthnx Posted at 11:04 am on Sep. 27, 2008
What the fuck is this?
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