Adding Reply Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic I have a new poem that I wrote Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post carracer Posted at 9:53 pm on Oct. 6, 2008 .

Replies untainted Posted at 10:04 pm on Oct. 6, 2008 as a reader i have to say i didn't think it was very good. i have no idea what you were trying to say in the poem. Corey Lynn Posted at 10:01 pm on Oct. 6, 2008 not to bad carracer Posted at 9:56 pm on Oct. 6, 2008 Quote: from Jadien at 9:54 pm on Oct. 6, 2008 It's really choppy. The sentences that rhyme ought to have the same syllables. Really interesting poem, though. I love the use of your words. I had that problem when I was writing. Do you have any specific suggestions? (Its a rough draft, so I am hoping to revise) Jadien Posted at 9:54 pm on Oct. 6, 2008 It's really choppy. The sentences that rhyme ought to have the same syllables. Really interesting poem, though. I love the use of your words. All 4 previous replies displayed.