Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic What Do You Do? (A Poem) Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]W o n d e r l a n d[/m] at 11:38 pm on Nov. 4, 2008[quote]Its quite alrite[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Anonymous Posted at 11:37 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 What do you do if your world's crashing down, If there's nowhere to turn, And you can't make a sound? What if you've built your life up,   Just to have it ripped away And all you feel is pain, each and every day? What if everything was as perfect as could be, Until you rose one day To find that it was all vanity? What do you do? What do you do if your faith disappears, If hope flees, And you are flooded with fears? What can you do if you're helpless and weak, If your voice is silenced And the future looks bleak? What can you say if your heart is a cracked stone, If you're cold and tired, And you feel all alone. What do you do? What do you do if you can't say a word, Nobody seems to see, And you aren't being heard? What if you are an army of one, With the saddest shield, And no spear or gun? How can you stand a chance in a world so blind, Where nobody cares And there is no shelter to find? What do you do? What do you do if you've been here before, Faced this hell and lived, But find that the devil's back for more? Where do you turn if nobody will understand, When all you want is comfort, And for someone to hold your hand? When do you tell them that you're not ok, Break down and let go, And find the words to say, I just don't know.... TO BE CONTINUED..................

Replies partyqueen12 Posted at 11:49 am on Mar. 5, 2009 it sucks and im not sayin nomo bloodylove Posted at 6:37 am on Nov. 21, 2008 i am in darkness and i am all cut up into pieces! bloodylove Posted at 6:37 am on Nov. 21, 2008 i am in darkness and i am all cut up into pieces! bloodylove Posted at 6:37 am on Nov. 21, 2008 i am in darkness and i am all cut up into pieces! bloodylove Posted at 6:37 am on Nov. 21, 2008 i am in darkness and i am all cut up into pieces! googlefish Posted at 8:35 am on Nov. 6, 2008 Have you written any other things? i would love to read them   Anonymous Posted at 8:18 am on Nov. 5, 2008 Quote: from googlefish at 5:24 am on Nov. 5, 2008 wow! i luv this poem!! Thanks! That makes me feel really good.   googlefish Posted at 5:24 am on Nov. 5, 2008 wow! i luv this poem!! Anonymous Posted at 11:59 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Quote: from SpM at 11:57 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Quote: from Anonymous at 7:51 am on Nov. 5, 2008 I was expecting that, but hey, I like the uniform style in a way... this was kinda spur-of-the-moment, and not exactly what I was planning when I decided to write a poem, but I thought it was kinda nice in some respects, so I didn't through it out... No need to mount a defensive; I was just offering some constructive criticism. I do like the second to last verse. Typo in the last verse, by the way: confort. Oh, sorry, I wasn't being defensive, I was just saying... thank you for both the criticism and the compliment btw... Sorry, about the typo, didn't realize it until just now...   SpM Posted at 11:57 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Quote: from Anonymous at 7:51 am on Nov. 5, 2008 I was expecting that, but hey, I like the uniform style in a way... this was kinda spur-of-the-moment, and not exactly what I was planning when I decided to write a poem, but I thought it was kinda nice in some respects, so I didn't through it out... No need to mount a defensive; I was just offering some constructive criticism. I do like the second to last verse. Typo in the last verse, by the way: confort. Anonymous Posted at 11:51 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Quote: from SpM at 11:48 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Pretty good by LiveWire standards, but it's length and rather simplistic structure give it a tiresome sing-song quality and, after one verse, you do feel like you've been here before. I was expecting that, but hey, I like the uniform style in a way... this was kinda spur-of-the-moment, and not exactly what I was planning when I decided to write a poem, but I thought it was kinda nice in some respects, so I didn't through it out... The Artery Posted at 11:49 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 i like it SpM Posted at 11:48 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Pretty good by LiveWire standards, but it's length and rather simplistic structure give it a tiresome sing-song quality and, after one verse, you do feel like you've been here before. Anonymous Posted at 11:46 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Quote: from xsolox at 11:38 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Its quite alrite Thanks.    I wish more people would have cared to read it, but hey, that what it's all about right? W o n d e r l a n d Posted at 11:38 pm on Nov. 4, 2008 Its quite alrite Most recent 15 of 16 previous replies displayed.