Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic Points if You Can Revise This. Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]uschb02[/m] at 5:23 pm on Nov. 23, 2008[quote]u could talk about what happens in this time?[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Allison Wonderland Posted at 5:21 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 I'm usually a rather impressive writer, but I am experiencing a rather huge lack of motivation. This paper was due Friday, and I haven't gotten around to writing it. I'm finally sitting down, but I'm stumped. Revise these first few sentences so I can have a strong introduction. Hopefully that will motivate my to complete the next 6 pages. Points to whomever has the most sophisticated revision. The Investiture Contest, more commonly referred to as "The Investure Controversy," was a feud between Henry IV, Holy Roman Emperor, and Pope Gregory VII in the 11th century. The dispute was over the control of appointments of secular lords and bishops.

Replies Allison Wonderland Posted at 5:31 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 Quote: from smurflikepebbles at 5:29 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 i hope that's not your intro. Your first sentence shouldn't say what your essay is about-but it should give them a glimpse. Dont name names.   Maybe talk about the setting. Comment about how life was during this whole controversy but dont give anything away yet. You want to catch their attention not bore them to death. This is a history paper, not a paper on something actually exciting. And no, that's why I was asking for revisions. smurflikepebbles Posted at 5:29 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 i hope that's not your intro. Your first sentence shouldn't say what your essay is about-but it should give them a glimpse. Dont name names. Maybe talk about the setting. Comment about how life was during this whole controversy but dont give anything away yet. You want to catch their attention not bore them to death. DuchessxInsanity Posted at 5:26 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 The Investiture Contest, or more commonly, "The Investiture Controversy," was conducted as a feud between Henry IV, Holy Roman Emperor, and Pope Gregory VII. Disputed in the 11th Century B.C, the feud was a result over a disagreement of the appointments of secular lords and bishops..... etc. uschb02 Posted at 5:23 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 u could talk about what happens in this time? Lally Posted at 5:23 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 The Investiture Contest, more commonly referred to as "The Investure Controversy," was a dispute between the Holy Roman Emperor, Henry IV, and Pope Gregory VII in the 11th century. The creative discussion was about the control of appointments of secular lords and bishops. OnOnE353 Posted at 5:22 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 Good luck! You have none. All 6 previous replies displayed.