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BellaBaby1717 Posted at 1:15 am on July 31, 2008
just past. I wrote this to sent to her, I would like some feed back and any revision ideas you may have!


Every day that I don't see you drags on
Like a never ending marathon to hell
Some how I wish I could break this horrid spell
I get so sad I feel like a turtle in a shell
I get so much comfort when I think of your warm smell
All the perfume you had to wear
The lovely way you styled your hair
All those freckles on your skin so fair
Some days I can't look in a mirror
'Cause it only reminds me of you
When you are here I can't be blue
With out you I have the "I wanted my mommy flu"
Think you could make me some beef stew?
Okay, how about just a soft tissue?
As the years rolled by and our relationship grew
I have to say I am so happy I had you!
Happy Birthday!
I  Love You!

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LightThisCity Posted at 1:16 am on July 31, 2008
good