Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic short poem Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Bi Kris[/m] at 11:01 pm on Aug. 3, 2008[quote]very nice.  getting the beginning word to match can get hard in later verses but these are good.[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Anonymous Posted at 10:59 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 i have the full version wrote down but i dont have it with me but the whole poem has the same begining lines (the,and,in,is)but it all makes sense but plz tell me what u think of this first lil part. the pull of a trigger and the drop of a pill in the hands of a man is the power to kill the abuse of a child and the house of dysfuntion in the life of a child is the path for corruption

Replies kattyy Posted at 11:03 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 Quote: from MaddiJune at 2:00 am on Aug. 4, 2008 sad, true, good...2 thumbs up :) same here Djs971 Posted at 11:03 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 cool thegirlandhermachine Posted at 11:02 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 it's pretty good . LoveAlwaysAndi Posted at 11:01 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 Quote: from Anonymous at 1:59 am on Aug. 4, 2008 i have the full version wrote down but i dont have it with me but the whole poem has the same begining lines (the,and,in,is)but it all makes sense but plz tell me what u think of this first lil part. the pull of a trigger   and the drop of a pill in the hands of a man   is the power to kill the abuse of a child and the house of dysfuntion in the life of a child   is the path for corruption i think you should PM me the whole thing Bi Kris Posted at 11:01 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 very nice.  getting the beginning word to match can get hard in later verses but these are good. isabelle demetri Posted at 11:01 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 sound sorta like the beginning of a Disturbed song.  Kudos, I like it. acausedelle Posted at 11:01 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 Quote: from HXC at 1:00 am on Aug. 4, 2008 sounds like lyrics to a bad death metal song. Basically. Sounds like something Origin would make. MaddiJune Posted at 11:00 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 sad, true, good...2 thumbs up :) HXC Posted at 11:00 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 sounds like lyrics to a bad death metal song. EDIT: on second thought, bad death metal song was redundant. crazy4you Posted at 10:59 pm on Aug. 3, 2008 Sounds good to me All 10 previous replies displayed.