Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic A few people I'm not Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Chocolate Thunda[/m] at 3:25 pm on Aug. 28, 2008[quote]I like it a lot. [/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Ad libitum Posted at 3:24 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 [A poem of one. Constructive criticism please!] Let me entice you to the rock pools, Where legends of lost loves will be basking on the rocks. Let us talk about lost memories, And listen to the never played symphonies. Come closer and catch my eye, Whilst conversation fades, washed away with the tides. Close those glistening green eyes, And think of someone you physically admire. On the count of three I will appear by your side, And on opening those green eyes you shall see someone you physically despise. I have no courage to chance feelings without a care, If you ask why I felt what I did, I will blame it on a dare. It's just about someone I used to like called Laura. There are influences of Morrissey and Tracey Thorn included in it.

Replies Ad libitum Posted at 3:26 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 Quote: from californication at 11:25 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 It isn't bad, but I'm not a huge fan What parts don't you like? Chocolate Thunda Posted at 3:25 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 I like it a lot. californication Posted at 3:25 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 It isn't bad, but I'm not a huge fan All 3 previous replies displayed.