Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic please what do you think?!? Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Scarlet Tears[/m] at 2:06 am on Sep. 5, 2008[quote]Well its good but personally Id change a few parts Still good though![/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post lindingair Posted at 1:39 am on Sep. 5, 2008 Sleepy nights Suddenly my sleepy nights Make dreamy days At times I imagine his lips Or my lips Touching his lips And some nights I've heard his voice Calling to my captive soul Contained Controlled In love I'm sold To my own Wild fantasies That neither will be torn from me Nor fulfilled Dreamy day and sleepy night I am reminded of That line Deep red and scrolled across The monument of my emotions Erected there to Keep me In shackles Chained Contained Controlled In love Still sold And Bought with fools gold

Replies Scarlet Tears Posted at 2:06 am on Sep. 5, 2008 Well its good but personally Id change a few parts Still good though! W o n d e r l a n d Posted at 1:58 am on Sep. 5, 2008 not my thing ragemore Posted at 1:45 am on Sep. 5, 2008 It's interesting, I think a little rough at parts. Like it felt to me that the last line didn't fit the rhythm of the whole poem. But I'm no expert. Overall I liked it though. Latin Muscle Posted at 1:40 am on Sep. 5, 2008 4 All 4 previous replies displayed.