Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic Is this any good? Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [mod]jamesish[/mod] at 8:46 pm on Sep. 11, 2008[quote]I like it as is.[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Danny11394 Posted at 8:45 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 I need opinions.What's good and what needs to be worked on? Thanks Not a cloud in the sky, I look to the light. Time soon passes, darkness covers the night. People grouped together, like wolves in a pack. There are people out here that will never come back. The fireworks flash and kids kissing all dash. Love takes everyone I know, so I am left all alone. But the thing I'm most scared of, lies right in front of me. That I'm afraid I'll never know real love. I hate this life I'm living. I want the luck other people are given. Thinking about giving up, thinking to just stop trying. But every time I see your face, I just keep on lying. Now what the hell is going on? What is this I have found? Every little thing I do, goes straight into the ground. I'll fight to the death for what I love and I'll fight to the end for you my friend. Nothing else can bother me. I'm at the lowest of the low.

Replies Danny11394 Posted at 8:53 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 No I wrote this when I was depressed.Lol.That's the point of it. It was saying how I was lonely when everyone else had a relationship going on. Hahaha. blueroadrunner Posted at 8:51 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 sounds like ur depressed........go look for a happy poem...and get rid of the one u just wrote..........life is what u make it.......don't choose stuff that brings u down.........get through this bump in the road........u can do it! reev Posted at 8:46 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 poetry doesn't always have to rhyme. jamesish Posted at 8:46 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 I like it as is. All 4 previous replies displayed.