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St Jimmy
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Posted at 7:20 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
Blah. I couldn't read it because you had CHANGED it |
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guitar lover
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Posted at 7:18 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| don't give up now its good but you just need some few fix ups. don't give up :( pm me if you want some help i know i could help you |
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K r e s c e n d o
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Posted at 7:17 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| It's okay [: |
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guitar lover
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Posted at 7:14 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| still say there names and everything just not all the time like look at a book and see how much they say he or she cause i know they don't say the name all the time. but then don't use he she all the time you know? |
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SpM
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Posted at 7:13 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| Haha, "drinking in his six ridges"? Your word choice is bizarre and your writing is just awkward to read. No flow. |
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RIMHfire
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Posted at 7:12 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| Stryker is a stupid name. |
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Anonymous
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Posted at 7:11 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
Quote: from guitar lover at 7:10 am on Sep. 14, 2008
first and for most before i read any ferther TOO MUCH Stryker this alexa this stryker this alexa this
Alright. I can change that. What should I say instead? "He? She?" |
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alastrxxna
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Posted at 7:10 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| Hot. |
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guitar lover
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Posted at 7:10 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| first and for most before i read any ferther TOO MUCH Stryker this alexa this stryker this alexa this |
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Anonymous
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Posted at 7:09 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
Quote: from The Fantasy at 7:08 am on Sep. 14, 2008
Stryker is an odd name.
True. That's not the point though, lol. Everything is subject to change at this point. I just need to know whether or not I did well with the scene. |
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Permious
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Posted at 7:09 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| "then you shall have me" i stopped reading after that. jesus fucking christ |
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The Fantasy
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Posted at 7:08 am on Sep. 14, 2008 |
| Stryker is an odd name. |
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