Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic An old poem I wrote Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]W o n d e r l a n d[/m] at 2:32 am on Nov. 23, 2008[quote]Its readable[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Dragonfang93 Posted at 2:31 am on Nov. 23, 2008 Okay, this poem is so close to my heart. I wrote it for my ex-boyfriend that passed away, so I hold it very close. I've been asked to read some poems at our graduation ceremony, I was just wondering what you think of one of the poems I've decided on: Until Forever Fades Away Some people say You only get one chance Some people's lives Are lived like a dance Particular steps In just the right way Until the pattern gets broken On one special day My dance was interrupted By a boy on a white horse And I fell in love With him of course He took my hand He took the lead He helped me mount His faithful steed We rode into the sunset And kissed under the stars Then we were connected By the love in our hearts He took my hand He told me how We glided over land Until the final bow We danced the night away Until the stars turned to day He turned to me And I heard him say 'I'll be by your side Until Forever Fades Away'

Replies twiikz Posted at 9:20 am on Mar. 31, 2009 -_- sorry about the bad news... but loved the poem. xxxx Dragonfang93 Posted at 2:41 am on Nov. 23, 2008 Quote: from Rayne237 at 9:05 pm on Nov. 23, 2008 I think it's really sweet.....Fiction? Or nonfiction? He needs a copy.... Some of it is fiction, some of it isn't... He's already read it... as I said, it's old... He read it before he died. kakashisensei Posted at 2:35 am on Nov. 23, 2008 uggg... seriously, life is a dance? Riding away into the sunset on a white horse? Did you purposefully look up every oversused cliche situations in poems and put  them in this? Your poem is a satire on poetry right? Rayne237 Posted at 2:35 am on Nov. 23, 2008 I think it's really sweet.....Fiction? Or nonfiction? He needs a copy.... xBeautifulTragedyx Posted at 2:34 am on Nov. 23, 2008 I like the first stanza. kakashisensei Posted at 2:34 am on Nov. 23, 2008 um i dont think poetrty is really your thing this sucks king kong balls kissmeimirish Posted at 2:33 am on Nov. 23, 2008 sorry to hear its really sweet and really good :) . Gaelle Posted at 2:32 am on Nov. 23, 2008 I like the meaning of it, but it's a bit too much rhyme for my taste. W o n d e r l a n d Posted at 2:32 am on Nov. 23, 2008 Its readable All 9 previous replies displayed.