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Topic my gone angel poem. is it good?:) let me kno:)
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smiileyy boo Posted at 8:07 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
my gone angel

god sent me an angel,
who cared for me an loved me like no other
then took him back.
i guess there must have been a mistake.
i thought it was me,
but i realized it was a learning experience.
to be careful who i love,
to let go when it's time to let go,
cause the longer you hang on the more it's goin
to hurt.
i hanged on for a long while.
i cant help but to think if he still thinks of me.
but time heals everything an everyone,
even heartbroken me.
an in time i will be on my way to beter livin.
free of any worries,
or sleepless nights only filled with tears.
cause i know there's someone
alot
better out there for me.
i cant earase

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smiileyy boo Posted at 8:18 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
Quote: from TheLastMagister at 8:16 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

Quote: from smiileyy boo at 10:15 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

Quote: from Fondziie at 8:13 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

awww cute..i love it!
 
 thank you very much  
 i know at least someone likes it lol  
 :)


I did say I liked it! I just said revise the grammar because it blows more than an inner city whore!


whore? wtf?

The Last Magister Posted at 8:16 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
Quote: from smiileyy boo at 10:15 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

Quote: from Fondziie at 8:13 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

awww cute..i love it!

thank you very much
i know at least someone likes it lol
:)


I did say I liked it! I just said revise the grammar because it blows more than an inner city whore!
smiileyy boo Posted at 8:15 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
Quote: from Fondziie at 8:13 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

awww cute..i love it!

thank you very much
i know at least someone likes it lol
:)
Fondziie Posted at 8:13 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
awww cute..i love it!
smiileyy boo Posted at 8:13 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
Quote: from SorryxSight at 8:09 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

grammar is horrible.

well srry my grammer isnt perfect but im not doing an essay.
hard candy Posted at 8:10 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
Quote: from SorryxSight at 8:09 pm on Dec. 19, 2008

grammar is horrible.

this ^

The Last Magister Posted at 8:10 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
Earase? I love that word. I think you mean erase.

A lot is two words

I wouldn't recommend using "even heartbroken me" just because it doesn't flow well,

Hanged is not a word, it's hung.

I like the content, I really do, just revise a bit please, for everyone's, including your own, sake.

SorryxSight Posted at 8:09 pm on Dec. 19, 2008
grammar is horrible.
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