Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic TOUCHED Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Mediocre[/m] at 8:41 pm on Dec. 23, 2008[quote]I thought this would be a song about child abuse. Disappointing.[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post RedNoir Posted at 8:40 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 Criticism is welcome.     when you waved at me,  I waved to you when you smiled at me, I smiled back. when you made a stupid joke, I laughed. when you read a book, I wanted to know more, more about it, more about you, and what you liked. when you hugged me(and it wasn't innocent), I giggled and I LET YOU. when I would've pushed anyone else away, I LET YOU.HUG.ME.THAT.WAY. I didn't squirm. I blushed. And later on I LET YOU. I LET YOU TOUCH ME. when you said those words, i was speechless. something I dreamed of was right there in my grasp. when my eyes widened, you closed in. when we touched for the first time, you pulled us together and the rest is a blur. but i liked it. and I let you take me to a place I haven't been in a while. and I ENJOYED IT. this time was different. all the way home i reveled in the memory of it. If I closed my eyes I could still feel your hands on my skin; I had this wierd smirk on my face and these strange moments wondering if others could see. Could they see? They thoughts reeling in my head of the events that had occured just two hours prior? I think one lady could. She wouldn't stop staring. SHE KNEW. when I got home i sat out on the patio and ate. I wished I was still there. the next day I CALLED. you didn't WANT to talk. two days later I SAW YOU you couldn't lay an eye on ME. when i said those words, your tongue was sharp when my eyes widened, you walked away no matter how hard i tried, i couldn't catch up when i finally did,  i held back the tears. when we touched for the last time, you pulled away so fast my heart stopped. i couldn't breathe. my spine was on fire. every nerve was jolted if i closed my eyes, i could still feel your hand bat mine away. I WAS IN SHOCK. I LET YOU PUSH ME THAT WAY. and just then I LET YOU. I LET YOU TOUCH ME.

Replies noireangel Posted at 8:52 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 Many Kudos to you   SpRiNgS Posted at 8:48 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 ltitle mushy but what do iknow i get what it's about thoough so it's good RedNoir Posted at 8:44 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 Quote: from bacardi950 at 8:43 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 after i read it all, i realised i liked it, it's good.     YAAAY!!! It's not to mushy is it? RedNoir Posted at 8:43 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 Quote: from WickedWiccan at 8:42 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 I think it's beautiful. Oh wow... thanks! bacardi950 Posted at 8:43 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 after i read it all, i realised i liked it, it's good. RedNoir Posted at 8:42 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 Quote: from Mediocre at 8:41 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 I thought this would be a song about child abuse. Disappointing. I knew I should've changed the title. Why does everyone think that!!!   WickedWiccan Posted at 8:42 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 I think it's beautiful. Xgrifgrif94X Posted at 8:41 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 i lie it... Mediocre Posted at 8:41 pm on Dec. 23, 2008 I thought this would be a song about child abuse. Disappointing. All 9 previous replies displayed.