Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic Here in your arms (poem) Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]emopenguinqueen[/m] at 3:41 pm on Dec. 29, 2008[quote]cute.[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Mikayla007 Posted at 3:41 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 In your arms again Do you remember me? I'm just a shadow now This is where I use to be Right here beside you Holding your hand until you slipped away You and I faded away Lost in a dream of what used to be But dreams aren't real I used to feel your velvet skin I used to touch you scarlet hair Feel your soft lips Listen to your husky voice Beckoning me to come closer to you I used to fit in your strong arms but that is no more You shut me out and locked the door My sprit anchored to the ground when it once soared Tears over whelming me You said you loved me but you'll never be the same You lied to my face Your love disappeared without a trace This love cannot be an eased I'll win the race To find my place in your arms again

Replies J U S T Posted at 3:46 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 I saw the title an immediately thought of the Hellogoodbye song. Anyway, the 5th and 6th line both ending in "away" makes it sound redundant, as does the overuse of the word "you" in lines 13-19. Actually "you" is scattered rather liberally throughout, which is annoying. Some of the rhymes seem too forced. Leelyy Posted at 3:44 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 :) AcidSilence Posted at 3:43 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 I like it. [: ivy1994 Posted at 3:42 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 I luvs it feels good Posted at 3:42 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 sweet emopenguinqueen Posted at 3:41 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 cute. Miss Vanity Posted at 3:41 pm on Dec. 29, 2008 Aww so sweet All 7 previous replies displayed.