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tragic romance Posted at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
For everything we know, we were wrong.
Pull figures close, crush the bones, and make wishes on the charred ashes
Of those we know... and loveD

The sun hasn't gone away
You can't miss what you never knew
Through the cracks in the walls and the glass
It was the dying light of your fading conscience

So one more night
Pull me close
Pretend that he's not home
This love is a gas
And your cigarette is already lit
So hand me that lighter
And we'll take off tonight, through burning passion and thick clouds we call desire.

We have no sense of right and wrong
The cross is just a fashion statement these days
We shouldn't feel badly that we are not abiding by the rules of Jesus

So come with me and take my hand
We'll dance in the blood puddles of old loves
And share the blame
As we end this razor blade masquerade
Gashes not paper cuts
So much for love...

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tragic romance Posted at 1:05 pm on Jan. 1, 2009
Quote: from GeneCosta at 11:36 pm on Dec. 30, 2008

I'm sorry to form a rude interlude - but why the fuck do people respond to threads saying they won't exert fourth-grade learning skills? Either respond to the poem, or don't.  

As for the poem, I like the imagery, but it smacks of teenage pretentiousness - it's Silvia Plath without any order.  


It is an exageration of teenage life?
And thanks for introducing me to an amazing author xD

GeneCosta Posted at 11:36 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
I'm sorry to form a rude interlude - but why the fuck do people respond to threads saying they won't exert fourth-grade learning skills? Either respond to the poem, or don't.  

As for the poem, I like the imagery, but it smacks of teenage pretentiousness - it's Sylvia Plath without any order.  

Ryan Potter Posted at 8:02 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
Quote: from sharpiemarker at 7:55 pm on Dec. 30, 2008

Quote: from XTCofGOLD at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008

not gonna lie i didn't read it

Um, 3?


Four.

Sorry.

xlovexmex Posted at 6:03 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
wow.
i liked it
it was simply amazing. <3
XTCofGOLD Posted at 5:56 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
Quote: from sharpiemarker at 5:55 pm on Dec. 30, 2008Quote: from XTCofGOLD at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008not gonna lie i didn't read it

Um, 3?[/quote

haha

poor topic creator

hiphopatihop Posted at 5:56 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
I loved it :)
sharpiemarker Posted at 5:55 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
Quote: from XTCofGOLD at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008

not gonna lie i didn't read it

Um, 3?

BabiiTempa Posted at 5:54 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
this is too long to read
MXfreak Posted at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
Quote: from XTCofGOLD at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008

not gonna lie i didn't read it

that makes 2 of us

XTCofGOLD Posted at 5:53 pm on Dec. 30, 2008
not gonna lie i didn't read it
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