Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic my poem ... Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]xoximperfection[/m] at 11:50 pm on Jan. 8, 2009[quote]Please comment, and be honest, i don't mind criticism. when i close my eyes storm clouds swirl a roar of thunder rumbles from my gut and my heart feels as if lightning struck how do i escape this world escape the pain that everyday brings the pain i have brought on myself by choices ive made there is no way out i see but i can be numb free myself for a day or two let myself crash and burn once again knowing i may not have the strength to stop myself knowing that nobody will catch me when i fall nobody to hold me tight whisper in my ear "everything will be alright, my dear" nobody to love me for who i am to help me take the right path so that i can make the choices of who i am and who i can, with time, be[/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post xoximperfection Posted at 11:50 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Please comment, and be honest, i don't mind criticism. when i close my eyes storm clouds swirl a roar of thunder rumbles from my gut and my heart feels as if lightning struck how do i escape this world escape the pain that everyday brings the pain i have brought on myself by choices ive made there is no way out i see but i can be numb free myself for a day or two let myself crash and burn once again knowing i may not have the strength to stop myself knowing that nobody will catch me when i fall nobody to hold me tight whisper in my ear "everything will be alright, my dear" nobody to love me for who i am to help me take the right path so that i can make the choices of who i am and who i can, with time, be

Replies CuntFace Posted at 12:01 am on Jan. 9, 2009 emo but i guess thats what you were shooting for, so yea its good Jman19 Posted at 11:57 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Quote: from xoximperfection at 8:56 pm on Jan. 9, 2009 Quote: from Jman19 at 11:55 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Pretty good.. would be better if you used punctuation and proper grammar. mehh, too tired right now lol. Fair enough. xoximperfection Posted at 11:56 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Quote: from Jman19 at 11:55 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Pretty good.. would be better if you used punctuation and proper grammar. mehh, too tired right now     Elisee Posted at 11:55 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Its really good! I likee it Jman19 Posted at 11:55 pm on Jan. 8, 2009 Pretty good.. would be better if you used punctuation and proper grammar. All 5 previous replies displayed.