Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic is this poem/writing better Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Leannbby[/m] at 6:44 pm on July 5, 2009[quote]than the last haha, i dont know if i have posted it before but oh well. this one doesn't rhyme As you hold me close we both begin to fall, fall into into the depths of which i have never touched, felt, or knew existed. Where is this coming from, why is it here? Then you rip the pulmonary veins that were kept so safe, we both begin to collapse into another unknown, the unknown and unwanted. [/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Leannbby Posted at 6:44 pm on July 5, 2009 than the last haha, i dont know if i have posted it before but oh well. this one doesn't rhyme As you hold me close we both begin to fall, fall into into the depths of which i have never touched, felt, or knew existed. Where is this coming from, why is it here? Then you rip the pulmonary veins that were kept so safe, we both begin to collapse into another unknown, the unknown and unwanted.

Replies xxemoxdemonxx Posted at 6:48 pm on July 5, 2009 i like it (: LiveForeverDieTonite Posted at 6:47 pm on July 5, 2009 It's interesting ehmusic Posted at 6:46 pm on July 5, 2009 This is very odd for a prose piece.  It sort of goes to shit at the end, but I sort of like it for some reason.  It definitely has potential. Areola Posted at 6:46 pm on July 5, 2009 I don't like this one. Other was better, and seemed more thought out. All 4 previous replies displayed.