Quoting Post Archived Topic: It will not be bumped to the top of the forum. Topic proof read this for me (french class) Membername   Not a member? Sign Up Free (takes 20 seconds) Password   Forgotten your password? Post Font: Verdana Arial Black Georgia Comic Sans Impact   Size: Tiny Normal Big Huge   Color: Default Dark Red Red Orange Brown Green Olive Cyan Blue Dark Blue Indigo Black [ Check Spelling ] [ Post Preview ] [ LiveTags ] Quote: from [m]Loza[/m] at 6:07 pm on Sep. 1, 2008[quote]oh. few mistakes. [/quote] FAQ Keyword Search: Post Options Favorites Manager Notify me of new replies to this topic by email Notify me of new replies to this topic by private message Original Post Permious Posted at 8:44 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 Je m'appelle Starla et je suis une femme de nuit. Quand j'avais treize ans, mes parents se sont morts. J'étais un SDF. J'ai fait la connaissance de rabbatteur qui s'appelle Pierre. Il me suis donné une maison et l'argent, mais il y avait un prix. Je devais coucher avec beaucoup de hommes et maintenant, j'ai le sida. Mais, je ne suis pas triste. J'aime les rapports sexuel, surtout les rapports anaux et ma vie est une aventure grande. Je mourrai bientôt mais premièrement, je veux marier.

Replies Shaknbake Posted at 6:53 pm on Sep. 1, 2008 I don't believe the term "Femme de nuit" exists in French. You could use "femme de demimonde," ou "demimondaine." A list of alternatives may be found là. You also don't need an indefinite article when talking about an occupation. "J'suis prostituée" et non "J'suis une prostituée." Mourir isn't reflexive. If you want "killed themselves," use se tuer or s'assassiner instead. You do need an indefinite article before rabbatteur. "Il m'a offert une maison et de l'argent, mais il y avait un prix;" would be better. "Me coucher," et non "coucher." "beacoup d'hommes" et non "beacoup des hommes." "SIDA" et non "sida." Use "d'abord" instead of "premièrement," and I believe marier IS. reflexive. Loza Posted at 6:07 pm on Sep. 1, 2008 oh. few mistakes. Shaknbake Posted at 11:54 pm on Aug. 29, 2008 A lot of that is terrible, but I really can't be bothered to correct something you only posted for the chance to type "rapports anaux" one more time. Changed my mind. See below. Tits McGee Posted at 8:49 pm on Aug. 28, 2008 Is that a true story? All 4 previous replies displayed.