-- Posted by Anonymous at 5:16 pm on June 25, 2008 . -- Posted by porcelain cinderella at 5:20 pm on June 25, 2008 It's pretty good for the most part but you rhyme at the end of you lines and then you stop so it doesn't really flow. -- Posted by Anonymous at 5:21 pm on June 25, 2008 Quote: from porcelain cinderella at 5:20 pm on June 25, 2008 It's pretty good for the most part but you rhyme at the end of you lines and then you stop so it doesn't really flow. that was intentional to show the increased stress and smooth flow with his mind