-- Posted by californication at 3:05 pm on June 27, 2008 I don't even know if you would call this crap I pulled out my butt poetry or if it even rhymes properly. But could I get your input on it? I wrote it in like 5 min. I didn't go over it, it is very rough, so take my crappiness into your consideration. You can walk away and go watch Queen While I sit here and try to dream Of a time when you didn't walk away A time were we could laugh and play Not disturbed by mechanical things And the sadness that their pleasure brings. For now all you do is stay away Alone in your room, not wanting to play Surrounded by light, he laughs and sings Not knowing of the sadness his pleasure brings For my eyes are blurry and cannot see The love he has forgotten to show me. -- Posted by californication at 3:09 pm on June 27, 2008 haha I suck -- Posted by save the world at 4:47 am on June 28, 2008 It's okay, but your negativity puts it in a poor light. -- Posted by lovelovelove at 4:10 pm on June 28, 2008 It's not very original. But I do give you credit as it is probably your first try.