-- Posted by dudeineedhelp at 2:49 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 gone -- Posted by Fortis Obscurum at 2:50 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 I didn't find it that good -- Posted by MXfreak at 2:50 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 fun stuff -- Posted by deaths door14 at 2:51 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 it's a pretty good start. -- Posted by HateParents at 2:51 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 What a genuine anecdote. -- Posted by gman101 at 2:51 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 i have no clue y you would want to think like a lipgloss. -- Posted by dudeineedhelp at 2:52 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 Quote: from HateParents at 10:51 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 What a genuine anecdote. hmm is that sarcasm lol -- Posted by Al Legator at 2:55 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 Honest opinion is- it doesn't really go very far. It doesn't engage the reader or make me care about what's going on. It almost sounds like a riddle, rather than a story.(Also, "quite" was mis-typed ; )  .) If you want to take it further, maybe make the lipgloss a seemingly minor but ultimately pivotal point in a story about the person...a clue in  a crime story, or an itme that bridges two individual lives or stories of two or more people. -- Posted by dudeineedhelp at 2:59 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 Quote: from Al Legator at 10:55 pm on Aug. 18, 2008 Honest opinion is- it doesn't really go very far. It doesn't engage the reader or make me care about what's going on. It almost sounds like a riddle, rather than a story.(Also, "quite" was mis-typed ; ) .) If you want to take it further, maybe make the lipgloss a seemingly minor but ultimately pivotal point in a story about the person...a clue in a crime story, or an itme that bridges two individual lives or stories of two or more people. thanks il keep that in mind