-- Posted by iwantcandy at 1:05 pm on Aug. 19, 2008 this is what i have so far. You didn't have to say anything, your eyes said it all. Nothing can make it leave, since the day i made that call. The smallest thing can change you..... k yeah, Something is missing. It just isn't right. Thoughts? Ideas? -- Posted by tennisplayerV2 at 1:06 pm on Aug. 19, 2008 what is this even about might help -- Posted by xBeautifulTragedyx at 1:06 pm on Aug. 19, 2008 It's fine to me. -- Posted by mudonthetires14 at 1:06 pm on Aug. 19, 2008 it needs another line.. i dk what though. i suck at this stuff. -- Posted by verl mcverl at 1:07 pm on Aug. 19, 2008 try and make your rhyming lines have the same amount of syllables, that might help