-- Posted by Anonymous at 3:32 am on Sep. 4, 2008 I suck!! How to improve this: My life is nothing but a path That leads to all we know My love is like a portal To what my spirit shows, A body is a chapter In a spirits life, A lump of earth, We call our own, For walking upon such wonder, Our minds are but sweet music, Simple and pretty to those who feel, A vision of trickery, Learnt from those of old To give us some to mean. I think its the last para that's the problem. Any ideas? -- Posted by KatieKaBOOM at 1:23 pm on Sep. 5, 2008 I think it's amazing!!!