-- Posted by ocdbabe at 9:56 pm on Sep. 4, 2008 I changed it a bit... I count the hours and the days I count the minutes, count the ways. I count until there is no more Continue counting, A silly chore. When he says he loves me so, I count the lies that I do know. But in all truth I love him back Truth be forgotten, for truth I lack. (Should it be 'a silly chore' or 'a pointless chore' or 'a lackluster chore' or should I say 'my' instead of 'a'?) -- Posted by TBMP at 10:01 pm on Sep. 4, 2008 I count the hours and the days I count the minutes, the shades of grey. I count until there is no more Continue counting, my worthless chore. When he says he loves me so, the truth is shown as lies i know. though in all truth I love him back but Truth's a contradiction, that's not intact jus my take on it, take what u want leave what u dont ^_^ -- Posted by californication at 10:01 pm on Sep. 4, 2008 Not bad, but I'mt not good at poems so I can't help you -- Posted by ocdbabe at 10:04 pm on Sep. 4, 2008 Quote: from TBMP at 10:01 pm on Sep. 4, 2008 I count the hours and the days I count the minutes, the shades of grey. I count until there is no more Continue counting, my worthless chore. When he says he loves me so, the truth is shown as lies i know. though in all truth I love him back but Truth's a contradiction, that's not intact     jus my take on it, take what u want leave what u dont ^_^ Yeah, I'm not changing the whole thing. It actually has meaning to it. 'Shades of grey' doesn't convey that meaning all that well.