-- Posted by Danny11394 at 8:45 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 I need opinions.What's good and what needs to be worked on? Thanks Not a cloud in the sky, I look to the light. Time soon passes, darkness covers the night. People grouped together, like wolves in a pack. There are people out here that will never come back. The fireworks flash and kids kissing all dash. Love takes everyone I know, so I am left all alone. But the thing I'm most scared of, lies right in front of me. That I'm afraid I'll never know real love. I hate this life I'm living. I want the luck other people are given. Thinking about giving up, thinking to just stop trying. But every time I see your face, I just keep on lying. Now what the hell is going on? What is this I have found? Every little thing I do, goes straight into the ground. I'll fight to the death for what I love and I'll fight to the end for you my friend. Nothing else can bother me. I'm at the lowest of the low. -- Posted by hI jAMES at 8:46 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 I like it as is. -- Posted by reev at 8:46 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 poetry doesn't always have to rhyme. -- Posted by blueroadrunner at 8:51 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 sounds like ur depressed........go look for a happy poem...and get rid of the one u just wrote..........life is what u make it.......don't choose stuff that brings u down.........get through this bump in the road........u can do it! -- Posted by Danny11394 at 8:53 pm on Sep. 11, 2008 No I wrote this when I was depressed.Lol.That's the point of it. It was saying how I was lonely when everyone else had a relationship going on. Hahaha.