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-- Posted by cadetjones2011 at 10:37 am on Sep. 20, 2008

ok so I wrote this poem for  me and my boyfriend

"Far Away"
We may live far away
But we know that our love will always stay
You have stolen my heart
And it kills me the whole time we are apart
But just knowing how much you love me
You have set my soul free
Everyday I feel your pain
And I know it's the worst kind of stain
But just know that you will always be a part of me
So can't you see
All I ever needed was you
I know you are true
And will never turn my world to blue
I am so glad you are in my life
And one day we shall become husband and wife
And when that special day comes our hearts will finally intertwine
By:Jessica Jones


-- Posted by xXxRiotxXx at 10:39 am on Sep. 20, 2008

Cold fear
I know that your here
Don't lie to me
What the fuck did you think?
That I would forgive you?
Be your best friend?
Just go away
And let this shit end

That's the last poem I wrote.
And yes, I like yours.


-- Posted by HangEmHigh at 10:39 am on Sep. 20, 2008

Awww that's really sweet =)


-- Posted by cadetjones2011 at 10:41 am on Sep. 20, 2008

Quote: from HangEmHigh at 10:39 am on Sep. 20, 2008


Awww that's really sweet =)
thanks


-- Posted by cadetjones2011 at 10:41 am on Sep. 20, 2008

Quote: from xXxRiotxXx at 10:39 am on Sep. 20, 2008


Cold fear
I know that your here
Don't lie to me
What the fuck did you think?
That I would forgive you?
Be your best friend?
Just go away
And let this shit end

That's the last poem I wrote.  
And yes, I like yours.


thanks and your poem is good to


-- Posted by breannafhchick06 at 10:52 am on Sep. 20, 2008

very nice


-- Posted by sadnessness at 10:56 am on Sep. 20, 2008

yeah its nice actually


-- Posted by cadetjones2011 at 1:04 pm on Sep. 20, 2008

Quote: from sadnessness at 10:56 am on Sep. 20, 2008


yeah its nice actually
thanks


-- Posted by KathyN at 2:47 pm on Sep. 20, 2008

Any poem is good if it expresses feelings and you can understand or/and identify with them.


-- Posted by cadetjones2011 at 3:59 pm on Sep. 20, 2008

Quote: from KathyN at 2:47 pm on Sep. 20, 2008


Any poem is good if it expresses feelings and you can understand or/and identify with them.
thanks


-- Posted by cadetjones2011 at 4:40 am on Sep. 27, 2008

Quote: from breannafhchick06 at 10:52 am on Sep. 20, 2008


very nice
thanks


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