-- Posted by carracer at 6:08 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 . Sorry. i don't leave my poetry on here for over a day, -- Posted by Joke at 6:08 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 a little emo, and too deep for me, but good i think? -- Posted by Kgarrett at 6:10 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 A little emo but it is good -- Posted by carracer at 6:10 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 Quote: from Joke at 6:08 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 a little emo, and too deep for me, but good i think? Emo?!? How is that emo at all? -- Posted by rawr41507 at 6:11 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 i like itt =] -- Posted by Feminawesome at 6:12 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 It's all right, but a little too drifty and it doesn't seem to have a whole lot of unique meaning. -- Posted by carracer at 6:14 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 Quote: from Feminawesome at 6:12 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 It's all right, but a little too drifty and it doesn't seem to have a whole lot of unique meaning. Would you mind elaborating? It may be drifty, but a philosophical poem should be. I'm not sure what you mean by unique meaning. -- Posted by cherrys77 at 6:19 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 Organize it better, otherwise not bad. -- Posted by Feminawesome at 6:38 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 Quote: from carracer at 6:14 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 Quote: from Feminawesome at 6:12 pm on Nov. 5, 2008 It's all right, but a little too drifty and it doesn't seem to have a whole lot of unique meaning. Would you mind elaborating? It may be drifty, but a philosophical poem should be. I'm not sure what you mean by unique meaning. If you're trying to make it philosophical, that's not coming through right now. Seems more like a mood-based escapist poem. =) As for unique meaning... poems need to have something juicy to dig into. The only meanings below the surface of this poem are, as far as I can see, pretty cliché. That's not to say it's not a good poem, because it is, but you could add to it a lot by experimenting more with original concepts.