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-- Posted by bananawhore at 3:31 pm on Nov. 20, 2008

version one:

Somewhere far away
Or not that far at all
In a deep, dark, jungle
Or in the center of soul
The beating of a battle drum
The beating of my heart
Listen to the shrieks of war
Or are those just my thoughts?
One thought still rests in my head.
Who is the enemy?
For this is unclear.
The enemy to be defeated
Is my own self doubt and fear.

version 2:
Somewhere far away
Or not that far at all
In a deep, dark, jungle
Or in the center of soul
The beating of a battle drum
The beating of my heart
Prepare for war
Who is the enemy?
For this is unclear.
The enemy to be defeated
Is my own self doubt and fear.



-- Posted by hersheyparker at 3:38 pm on Nov. 20, 2008

first.


-- Posted by DemolitionxXxLover at 3:45 pm on Nov. 20, 2008

I like the second one better


-- Posted by Written in Love at 3:52 pm on Nov. 20, 2008

numero dos.


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