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-- Posted by pujolsfan at 12:16 pm on June 30, 2009
What is it: This is a poetry contest. If you so choose, you will write a birthday poem for a girl who is turning 18. Her name is Shay Mecke. (first e is short, last e is long) Background: I am in need of a poem to give to a girl on her 18th birthday. Her birthday is July 30th. Remember, we are just friends...so please, nothing that will creep her out. Nora helped me out immensely and she came up with the following. You may either modify it to your liking, or create a completely new poem. It's up to you. I like the first verse and part of the second verse. There are also a few lines that she came up with in addition to the original poem, so you can use that in it if you would like. I'm writing this poem for a girl named Shay, For every year there is a day, In which another year is turned, And thus another digit earned. And on the thirtieth of July, (Hallelujah! By and by,) Shay is turning eighteen years, And so we all can shout our cheers! With years come age, with age we move And I hope that I will prove, That when you go to the C of O, I'll miss walking the ways you go, You're really awesome at guitar, ------------I'm not liking this part... And going each week to The Rivr. Happy Birthday, Shay Mecke, Have a great day, and Au Rivoir! Not only is eighteen divisible by two, It is now the number that represents you! Child to adult in just one day, It's really pretty awesome, Shay! Guidelines: The only thing that I ask is for you not to use any profanity, suggestive things, and try not to make it romantic. Other than that you are free to do whatever you want. I will say that I like poems that rhyme because I think they are fun, but you don't have to do it that way if you don't want. I don't want to limit you. Prizes: I currently have 4000 points that I'm willing to depart with and have a few other people willing to make contributions. Deadline: July 28th If you have any poetic talent at all, please give it a shot!!! I will get this put up on the contest page as soon as possible and hopefully get a sticky.
-- Posted by acausedelle at 12:19 pm on June 30, 2009
Sweet! You finally got this into a contest.
-- Posted by Kitty Kiska at 12:22 pm on June 30, 2009
Well Shay it,s your 18th birthday A very special day One that you should celebrate In a very special way A day for you to remember Time to have some fun Maybe throw a party And share a drink with everyone So today on you 18th birthday Best wishes I send to you May your future be forever bright And may all your dreams come true
-- Posted by Kitty Kiska at 12:25 pm on June 30, 2009
It's good to have friends Friends who care, Friends who you know Will always be there When you need them, And never complain, When you tell the same story Again and again. Happy Birthday, my friend!
-- Posted by pujolsfan at 12:26 pm on June 30, 2009
Quote: from im with stupid at 2:19 pm on June 30, 2009
Sweet! You finally got this into a contest.
its not a contest yet...soon to be though
-- Posted by SpRiNgS at 1:47 pm on June 30, 2009
Hey Shay I know turning eighteen can be cool and frightening but no need to fret cause like max goof said "this is the first day of the rest of your life" and he does have a point from this moment on you're not just a girl in this land you're blossoming into a wo-MAN
-- Posted by iBritt at 2:33 pm on June 30, 2009
You're an adult now But you're still my little girl Remember the time we Spoke out against world? It was you and me for a moment It will be us for a lifetime Today's your reckoning Don't let it go to waste.
-- Posted by S0LITUDE at 3:28 pm on June 30, 2009
I'm not sure I would want someone to write a poem for me so that I could give it to someone else. :/ That just seems awkward to me. I think the fact that you do it yourself is what really makes it special.
-- Posted by iBritt at 5:47 pm on June 30, 2009
Quote: from S0LITUDE at 6:28 pm on June 30, 2009
I'm not sure I would want someone to write a poem for me so that I could give it to someone else. :/ That just seems awkward to me. I think the fact that you do it yourself is what really makes it special. 
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-- Posted by pujolsfan at 4:39 pm on July 1, 2009
Quote: from S0LITUDE at 5:28 pm on June 30, 2009
I'm not sure I would want someone to write a poem for me so that I could give it to someone else. :/ That just seems awkward to me. I think the fact that you do it yourself is what really makes it special. 
i agree. but there is a problem with that...i cant write poetry.
-- Posted by R Blake at 6:14 am on July 3, 2009
Hi pujolsfan! Cool to hear about your friend's b-day. I wrote this for her, and though it may be on the short side I really hope you like it: Shay Mecke, 18-to-be Seven months since New Year's eve The fireworks are like your life Spiraling up into flight They say that youth is tied to fun Well I say youth is in the sun As long as birthdays light the sky You'll have joy in all your life I've always treasured all my friends Those whom talk and smiles lend And you I treasure eighteen times Today, for with you friendship rhymes In years to come we'll grow together Days of fair and cloudy weather Now let us think of futures bright And toast your 18 years tonight!
-- Posted by pujolsfan at 12:33 pm on July 3, 2009
Quote: from R Blake at 8:14 am on July 3, 2009
Hi pujolsfan! Cool to hear about your friend's b-day. I wrote this for her, and though it may be on the short side I really hope you like it: Shay Mecke, 18-to-be Seven months since New Year's eve The fireworks are like your life Spiraling up into flight They say that youth is tied to fun Well I say youth is in the sun As long as birthdays light the sky You'll have joy in all your life I've always treasured all my friends Those whom talk and smiles lend And you I treasure eighteen times Today, for with you friendship rhymes In years to come we'll grow together Days of fair and cloudy weather Now let us think of futures bright And toast your 18 years tonight! 
i'll be honest... i like that pretty well. not sure about the beginning with the fireworks. but other than that, i think it was really good :)
-- Posted by Kitty Kiska at 6:19 am on July 4, 2009
On your 18th birthday you are given a key To a whole new world to explore and see With many decisions for you to make That effect the future path you take But i am sure, that in your heart You know exactly where to start So for the moment just have some fun And celebrate with everyone For your 18th birthday you must enjoy Your an adult now so don,t be coy
-- Posted by Kitty Kiska at 6:22 am on July 4, 2009
You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.
-- Posted by pujolsfan at 2:25 pm on July 5, 2009
Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009
You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.
whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do
-- Posted by Kitty Kiska at 5:49 am on July 6, 2009
Quote: from pujolsfan at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009
Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009
You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.
whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do 
Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean?
-- Posted by pujolsfan at 5:10 am on July 7, 2009
Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 7:49 am on July 6, 2009
Quote: from pujolsfan at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009
Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009
You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.
whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do 
Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean?
yeah, i kinda wanted it to be generic. be artsy with words and not necessarily things about her. the less personal it is the less creepy she will think i am
-- Posted by Kitty Kiska at 11:58 am on July 7, 2009
Quote: from pujolsfan at 1:10 pm on July 7, 2009
Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 7:49 am on July 6, 2009
Quote: from pujolsfan at 10:25 pm on July 5, 2009
Quote: from Kitty Kiska at 8:22 am on July 4, 2009
You know the point of poems is so that they are meaningful, people here can write poems but not about anything to do with your friendhsip with this girl.
whatever someone here is able to do is going to be a lot better than what i could attempt to do 
Well then you could have suggested more things to include...like she likes apples and the colour red and hates dogs, is scared of butterfly's...somehting for the artistic people to work with you know what i mean?
yeah, i kinda wanted it to be generic. be artsy with words and not necessarily things about her. the less personal it is the less creepy she will think i am 
Well i guess so.
-- Posted by R Blake at 1:20 am on July 9, 2009
OK, here's my alternate version. If you'd like me to mix the two, or change either of them just let me know! How exciting can it be When all can hear, and say and see That Shay Mecke has turned 18 I think it's one amazing thing As friend I count you, rain or shine And more skies you've yet to find Wherever you can see a path I'm sure you'll live it with a laugh I send you health and happiness And much good luck, and joy no less When all is said and all is done Remember all the birthday fun 18 years have led you here Decades more of life and cheer Are waiting just around the bend Congratulations, my good friend!
-- Posted by pujolsfan at 2:15 pm on Aug. 3, 2009
Quote: from R Blake at 8:14 am on July 3, 2009
Hi pujolsfan! Cool to hear about your friend's b-day. I wrote this for her, and though it may be on the short side I really hope you like it: Shay Mecke, 18-to-be Seven months since New Year's eve The fireworks are like your life Spiraling up into flight They say that youth is tied to fun Well I say youth is in the sun As long as birthdays light the sky You'll have joy in all your life I've always treasured all my friends Those whom talk and smiles lend And you I treasure eighteen times Today, for with you friendship rhymes In years to come we'll grow together Days of fair and cloudy weather Now let us think of futures bright And toast your 18 years tonight! 
YOU WIN!!!
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